Wednesday, August 17, 2011

The poor family

Once up a time, there was a city called "lights go out". In that city, there was a house. In the house, there was three people. One day, the lights went out, So they bumped. But they were so poor that they did not even have any money to go to the doctors. They were always hungry because they only earned 7 dollars a day. Then they moved after they had no fun living in the old home. Later when they moved, it was a lot funner because they earned six hundred dollars every day.
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  1. MomAugust 17, 2011 at 3:23 PM

    How come they earn 7 dollars before and 600 dollars later?

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  2. LinLinAugust 17, 2011 at 3:23 PM

    Because there were more ways to earn money

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  3. MomAugust 17, 2011 at 3:27 PM

    Good answer. Please show your compassion and respect to poor people. Remember the homeless shelter we visited before?

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  4. DadAugust 17, 2011 at 5:37 PM

    It happened in the past. It is good you used past tense. There are a few places you used present tense. Could you please correct them?

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  5. DadAugust 17, 2011 at 5:43 PM

    Earning more money may not always be more fun. (You mean "funner" no "funnier"?) It is said that money (or wealth) does not equal happiness.

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